work cited

Work cited

Blythe, Nils. “Mumbai’s slum life poses world problems.” BBC News Outline. 29 sept 2011      http://news.bbc.co.uk

Eaves, Elisabeth. “two billion slum dwellers.” 6 Nov. 2011. http://www.forbes.com/

Fink, Sheri. “cities of the poor I: life in the slums (Kenya).” Public Radio international: the           world. 29 sept. 2011. http://www.theworld.org/

“urbanization.” World geography: understanding a changing world. 29 sept. 2011. http://worldgeography.abc-clio.com        

final draft

Section: 3A/B

10 November 2011

Onerous slums of despair

Today there are 7 billion people on earth. It is sad that about half of those 7 billion people live in bad conditions of poverty in a broken down corner of a city; the houses in these areas are usually tightly packed and broken down. These areas are called slums. Other than a bad appearance what other negative effects could slums have on human environment? Well, slums have lack of sanitation; they are a depressing environment, and are just plain bad places to live. How do these factors contribute to problems in the environment of humans?

            One of the problems with slums, the poverty of the lands known as the slum is very depressing for the children slum dwellers. Many children in the slums are so stricken by their depressing lives “they’re sniffing glue” (Nils. “Mumbai’s slum life poses world problems”) and doing other drugs. Why would young children be doing this very dangerous drugs; glue is an inhalant and one of the most dangerous drug families, and could kill the child the very fist time the user inhales. one of the evident factors would be their trying to escape from their problems. These children are suffering and looking for a way out of their suffering. What other factors could be harmful to humans and found in slums?

            Slums lack sanitation and this could result in the spreading of disease. Although it is true not all slums lack sanitation, the ones that do have poor sanitation.  Some like Dharavi the largest slum in Mumbai has “public toilets and water taps, but sanitation is poor with open sewers” (Nils. “Mumbai’s slum life poses world problems”). Most slums not have sanitation and are forced to use “flying toilets” (Nils. “Mumbai’s slum life poses world problems”). What other problems are present?

            “A jumble of rusted metal roofs” (Nils. “Mumbai’s slum life poses world problems) is how Fink describes the slums from over a hillside. Slums are dangerous settings and not very good places to live. Some who call this place home disagree and say that “there is a sense of belonging” (Nils. “Mumbai’s slum life poses world problems) that they say “I’m not the only person who’s maybe poor” (Nils. “Mumbai’s slum life poses world problems) these people are just use to the thought of never getting anywhere and that in the slums they belong to a brethren or a family. What does this mean in the end?

            Overall slums are terrible places where the innocent are try to forget just how little their life is worth in a slum. Slums are depressing, dirty, and just bad places to live but people that live in a slum often have little or no choice that to live there and take on the suffering; although that is true people who call these slums home see light that is not really there, an illusions of  some sort. Are the slum dwellers really happy the? Have these people gotten so use to walking in darkness that their eyes have gotten use to it?                             

rough draft

Guillermo San Miguel

Section: 3A/B

10 November 2011

Onerous slums of despair

Today there are 7 billion people on earth. It is sad that about half of those 7 billion people live in bad conditions of poverty in a broken down corner of a city; the houses in these areas are usually tightly packed and broken down. These areas are called slums. Other than a bad appearance what other negative effects could slums have on human environment? Well, slums have lack of sanitation; they are a depressing environment, and are just plain bad places to live. How do these factors contribute to problems in the environment of humans?

            For starters, the poverty of the lands known as the slum is very depressing to children dwellers. Many children in the slums are so stricken by their depressing lives “they’re sniffing glue” (Nils. “Mumbai’s slum life poses world problems”) and doing other drugs. Why would young children be doing this very dangerous drugs; glue is an inhalant and one of the most dangerous drug families, and could kill the child the very fist time the user inhales. one of the evident factors would be their trying to escape from their problems. These children are suffering and looking for a way out of their suffering. What other factors could be harmful to humans and found in slums?

            Slums lack sanitation and this could result in the spreading of disease. Although it is true not all slums lack sanitation, the ones that do have poor sanitation.  Some like Dharavi the largest slum in Mumbai has “public toilets and water taps, but sanitation is poor with open sewers” (Nils. “Mumbai’s slum life poses world problems”). Most slums not have sanitation and are forced to use “flying toilets” (Nils. “Mumbai’s slum life poses world problems”). What other problems are present?

            “A jumble of rusted metal roofs” (Nils. “Mumbai’s slum life poses world problems) is how Fink describes the slums from over a hillside. Slums are dangerous settings and not very good places to live. Some who call this place home disagree and say that “there is a sense of belonging” (Nils. “Mumbai’s slum life poses world problems) that they say “I’m not the only person who’s maybe poor” (Nils. “Mumbai’s slum life poses world problems) these people are just use to the thought of never getting anywhere and that in the slums they belong to a brethren or a family. What does this mean in the end?

            Overall slums are terrible places where the innocent are try to forget just how little their life is worth in a slum. Slums are depressing, dirty, and just bad places to live but people that live in a slum often have little or no choice that to live there and take on the suffering; although that is true people who call these slums home see light that is not really there, an illusions of  some sort. Are the slum dwellers really happy the? Have these people gotten so use to walking in darkness that their eyes have gotten use to it?                             

intro paragraph

There are about 6.9 billion people on earth today, strange how it took all of human history up to around the 1800s for world population to reach the first 1 billion, and now the world's population grows by another 1 billion every 12 years. This increase in population is due to the grate advances in human way of life ( medical sience, sanitation etc.). Some people live well and some do not. The people who unfortunatly do not live well and live in poverty live in mostly in the broken down area of the city that is surrounded by extreme poverty, or slums. Out of all the worlds population about half of the live in slums. So what is a slum dwellers life like? The life of a slum dweller brings many challenges into everyday life, some example absence of sanitation, the depressing enviorment, and the ever increasing population. How do these challenges affect humans' everyday life?     

outline

I introduction:
 A. hook: today there are about 6.9 billion people on earth today.
B. introduce the reader to what is a slum: slum: an area of a city surrounded by broke down houses and extreme poverty.
C. thesis statement: living in a slum brings many challenges to everyday life, for example the absence of sanitation, the depression from the enviornment, and the ever increasing population.
D. transition to first paragraph: how do these challenges affect humans' everyday life?
II defendable point #1:
A. main idea: the absence of sanitation is one of the thing a slum dweller's life comes with.
B. supporting evidence:
i:
quote:
source: "theworld.org"
quote:(ongera) " that's the sewage. now it's passing through the slums."
ii:
paraphrase: in most slums the absence of sanitation is very common.
C. explanation: this quote indicates the absence of sanitation is very common.
D. translation to the next paragraph: what other burdens does living the life of a slum dweller bring?
III
defendable point #2  
A. main idea: living as a slum dweller brings much pain and suffering.
B. supporting evidence:
i:
quote: "they are sniffing glue?"
ii:
paraphrase: young boys are using inhalants.
C. explanation: this quote explains the pain the boys are going through, young boys doing inhalants indicates the boys live burdenful lives and what to forget.
D. transition to the next paragraph: that other burdens can a slum bring to the lives of its dwellers?
IV
A. main idea: slum dwellers live in a state of fear.
B. supporting evidence:
i: qoute: "more people will be living i cities than in the country."
ii:  paraphrase:more people are moving to cities.
C. explanation:  urbaniation has massively increased population and the demand for land has increased.
D. transition sentence to conclusion paragraph: what does this mean in the end?
V conclusion:
A. hook: in conclusion slums are very negitive places with very negitive affects on it people.
B. restate thesis: slums bring meny burdens to its dwellers lives.
C. summarize argument: slums bring many problems to the people that inhabit it, the absence of sanitation, its depressing enviernment, and its ever increasing population really do make its dwellers lives burdenful.
D. leave the reader with something to think about: would life in a slum really be worth living.        

thesis statement

overall living in a slum bring a lot of negative such as effects emotional problems (sadness, depression), economic problems (worries of losing lands and homes), yet living in a slum can brining out the good in people (people are unites in tough times).